A Fiery Gospel

[Tetsuwan Penguin]

konbanwa == 'good evening' at least that's what I was trying for.
sumimasen == 'excuse me', there are other ways to say that, but sumimasen is supposedly the most common.

I don't know what the proper romanization for no is but it's pronounced 'eeya' AFAIK.

I'll go look for those errors. Amazing how many times I can read my stuff and STILL miss little things.

FF only allows copy and paste on your own stuff, I guess that's to protect people from getting ripped off (but you still might be able to DL the HTML source anyway, depends on your browser.)

BTW something is broken on the FF site, you obviously have read the 4th chapter, but the site tells me that nobody has yet 'visited' it.

[FelicityRedbarrow]

I've been quietly reading and enjoying your story. I couldn't help but notice that you are calling Ochanomizu's secretary/assistant "Yuki." I always thought her name was "Yuko." Is this intentional?

Looking forward to more!

[Tetsuwan Penguin]

NO, a typo. I think I have spelled it both ways. I'll go back and correct that eventually. Thanks for pointing it out.

[Little Brown Fox]

Oh yeah, I forgot about that one, but I saw that, too. As for something in FF being broken, I wouldn't know. Sometimes it's a little slow in some areas; certain things won't show up right away... As to your issue, I'm afraid I cannot help you. I do not think I get viewers for my own stories every day.

[Tetsuwan Penguin]

Oh yeah, I forgot about that one, but I saw that, too. As for something in FF being broken, I wouldn't know. Sometimes it's a little slow in some areas; certain things won't show up right away... As to your issue, I'm afraid I cannot help you. I do not think I get viewers for my own stories every day.

Well I know that you and Felicity have read the 4th chapter, and I'm sure that Dan has, but the site shows ZERO hits for that one. So I guess something is broken in their database. I think the total number of views may be right, just not the tally for each chapter. Oh well.

I still haven't found the 'broken' sentence, if you could give me the wording at the end of it I could search for it. I'm working on getting the 5th chapter ready to post, there will be 9 in all, weighing in around 55-60K words total, so it is at novel length.

Oh and Cobalt does show up some more in the story, not a major role, but he's in there.

[Little Brown Fox]

Mm, I forget the wording, exactly... I believe that Black Jack is mentioned in it, though, or at least somewhere close to. It's also kind of close to that "Monnsufu" typo, I think...

Only 9? Not a very long novel, then. But then, I probably shouldn't be talking, as prone as I am to oneshots, myself... (it's just that I'm so used to Harry Potter, ahaha...)

[Tetsuwan Penguin]

Only 9? Not a very long novel, then. But then, I probably shouldn't be talking, as prone as I am to oneshots, myself... (it's just that I'm so used to Harry Potter, ahaha...)

Well the length of a novel isn't measured in chapters but the number of words, anything over 50,000 words is considered a novel and I'm probably closer to 60,000 with this one. The chapters are running between 5000-7500 words each, which IS rather long for a chapter I suppose ...

[Tetsuwan Penguin]

https://www.fanfiction.net/s/11420302/5/A-Fiery-Gospe


5th chapter is up

[Little Brown Fox]

I do so love long chapters. This makes me wonder how many words the later Harry Potter novels have...

I'll point out any obvious (and not so obvious) errors if I find them. :3

Right, so. I thought the police chief's name was Nakamura, not Nakaruma?

There are a few snags here and there, but nothing I can actually point out, due to the "no copy-pasting" stuff in place on FF. And I'm terrible at pointing out exact phrases, otherwise, and don't feel like typing them out this time... It's still readable, though.

Oh, one thing I might be able to point out: Reno says something about putting something in the trunk, but the actual sentence is like, "I it them in the trunk of your car."

[Tetsuwan Penguin]

Yeah sometimes when I upload a file from my computer to the site it mangles a few things, looses spaces or words. I think that's what happened to the last thing you noticed. I guess I typed the police chief's name wrong and cut and pasted it all over the place that way. I double checked his name with Google and what I found agreed with what you wrote, so I changed that. Oh the way I spelled Tokugwa probably isn't the way that it was spelled in the Wiki, but it IS the accepted spelling for the family name. Maybe both are right, so I've left that as is.